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I am reasonably certain, which after the passage of so many 
years and so much living is not so easy to be, that the first time I 
heard of  a new science fiction tv show, to be called Star Trek, was 
from Harlan Ellison at his palatial, more or less, Studio Hills home, 
Ellison Wonderland. Outside, as one entered, there was a sign that read,
 Never Look Down, Always Look Up. When You Look Down, All You See  Is 
The Pennies People Drop. This bit of homey wisdom stuck with me until 
the day I looked down and found $73 someone had dropped. After it 
remained unclaimed for three weeks at the store outside which I had found
 it, I got to keep it.  Since then I have been careful to look down a 
bit more often.
 
I am also pretty sure that give a few words or more, what Harlan said
 was that he had been hired (he supported himself mainly by writing tv 
scripts in those days),  by some producer I had never heard of named 
Gene Roddenberry, to write a script for a new sf tv show that was to be 
aimed at adults and not kiddies, titled Star Trek. It was about a 
starship and its crew exploring new and unknown worlds and regions of 
the galaxy, and Roddenberry had, Ellison bragged, sold it the studio 
programming executives by telling them it would be like the then hit 
Western-themed television series about a wagon train crossing the U.S.,
 which focused each week on a different passenger’s story or on some 
encounter by the train’s leaders with a threatening problem. “He told 
them it would be ‘Wagon Train to the Stars’,” Harlan chortled. “But he 
was kidding them. He intends it to be a lot better.”
Harlan himself had just finished his initial script for the series, a
 little thing called “City on the Edge of Forever.” Roddenberry and his 
associate producer, Gene Coon, were so excited about it, Harlan told me,
 that they thought it was one of the best scripts they had ever seen and
 where showing it around to other potential ST writers as an example of 
the kind of story they were looking for. Harlan had a copy of the 
script, of course, and I read at least the first few pages, which had a 
strong antidrug message, and possibly the whole script, with mounting 
wonder at the quality of the science fictional thinking that had gone 
into it and at the sophistication, for the era, of its writing.
All this proved very ironic in terms of what happened later. First 
the network standards and practices people, or maybe it was the two 
Genes, insisted the antidrug message embodied in the opening teaser of 
Harlan’s script had to go. No member of the crew, they decreed, could be
 shown as a crook, a drug addict, or otherwise engaged in any form of 
illicit activity. In Ellison’s first version  a futuristic drug dealer 
who had been peddling his wares to various crew members escaped the 
clutches of security and beamed down through a timewarp to Earth in the 
past, where he threatened to change history for the worse.  Kirk, Spock 
and Yeoman Rand (who Harlan dated briefly) go after him.  With drugs and
 a drug dealer ruled out, Harlan was told he must substitute one of ST’s
 three stars (namely Dr. McCoy to cut down on expenses) for the drug 
dealer role and come up with an alternate way go get him down to the 
planet. Someone at ST suggested that a subspace disturbance could cause 
the camera (er-I mean ship) to lurch causing the good doctor (a 
reference that actually relates to Samuel Johnson and not Isaac Asimov, 
although I revere both equally)  to accidentally inject himself with a 
toxic substance which would drive him mad, causing him to jump into the 
transporter. Harlan foamed at the mouth over this, as well he might, 
screaming at the producers that a doctor “accidentally” injecting 
himself was an idea somewhere below stupid. He offered to dream up a 
more plausible explanation and rewrite the scene in a somewhat more 
believable fashion.  In his final draft, McCoy gets bit by an infected 
alien creature he is researching, goes crazy, beams down, etc. But the 
two Genes apparently liked their idea better and had the script 
rewritten so that McCoy injects himself accidentally when the ship 
lurches – and the artificial gravity glitches somehow. But the 
indignities, for a script the Genes themselves had proclaimed an 
exemplar of the kind of script they wanted for the show, were only 
beginning.
Then came the matter of the ending. In Harlan’s original draft, the 
drug dealer, bad as he is, instinctively saves a woman he sees about to 
be run over and killed by a truck. Her death, Kirk and Spock have 
learned, results in positive social changes that lead to the future 
being more peaceful and the birth of the Federation and the universe 
from which they, their crew, and everyone they know and love comes. If 
she lives, their future world will never come into existence and the 
stars will be constantly at war and trillions will perish.
Spock, ever logical, tackles the drug dealer to prevent him from 
rescuing the woman, thus preserving the more or less peaceful future of 
the Federation by allowing her die. Kirk, who has fallen in love with 
her, stands frozen, unable to bring himself to tackle her rescuer, and 
thus through inaction allowing her to live and prevent his entire future
 universe from coming into being. Spock later consoles him that no one 
ever loved a woman so much they were willing to give up a universe for 
her. (Note the breathtaking originality of the idea that passes by so 
quickly here. For in Ellison’s epic it is the bad guy who is trying to 
save the heroine and the hero who must cooperate in her death taking 
place.)
When the producers had finished with the script and had it rewritten 
to their heart’s content, it is McCoy, the humanist, who  instinctively 
tries to rescue the woman when he sees her about to be hit by a truck.  
This time it is Kirk, the show’s hero and star, rising selflessly to put
 the greater good of the people of his universe above love (as a good 
WWII Naval captain should) who tackles the man about to save her, 
dragging the good doctor back, as he watches the woman he loves perish 
before his eyes.
On one visit to Ellison Wonderland, not long before the episode 
aired, he told the several of us there that when he had read the final 
shooting script they had changed everything (even moving the locale from
 Chicago to New York, despite the fact that the whole thing was shot on 
the back lot) and every bit of dialogue in what the two Genes had once 
deemed the model Star Trek script. The producers did keep one thing 
though, he remarked somewhat disconsolately. “At one point I described a
 planet as ’silvery’. They kept the word ’silvery’. ”
It was a sad commentary on a business well known for its dementia.
And, yet, when the show did air, knowing all I knew, I still had to 
admit that even the bones of what Ellison had conceived, broken and 
rearranged, made one of the best television episodes of any show I had 
seen all year.
It has of course been ranked since as one of the Best 100 Television 
Episodes of All Time, and was voted a Hugo Award by the assembled 
attendees of the World Science Fiction Convention the next Year.  Harlan
 got his revenge, though, when his original script for the show was 
voted Best Hour-Long Script by his fellow television writers at Writers 
Guild of America annual awards dinner. Beating out, it should be noted 
for those who do not believe in karma, a script by Gene Coon, who had 
done a good deal of the rewriting on Harlan’s Script.
It was not long after hearing Harlan’s glowing endorsement of the 
show, and I think before things started to go really bad with his script
 and the show’s producers, that at the July 1966 Westercon I learned  an
 episode of Star Trek would be screened at the con to see what fans 
thought, several months in advance of the program’s television debut. So
 you can imagination with what keen anticipation I looked forward to 
that screening. (I believe this marked the first time any television 
producer had taken cognizance of the science fiction world and sought 
its reaction. Anyone who has ever been to ComicCon or DragonCon knows 
things have changed a bit since then.)
In the next instalment of these memoirs, I will talk about that 
screening, my personal reaction to it, and what I remember of fan 
reaction in general.
Jean Marie Stine
Co-Publisher 
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author, Herstory & Other Science Fictions, ebook an paperback